Poor Imp

Always fun to read, Grif. The most amusing bits, doubtless, had to be "Grif's" reaction to Incan's 'adequate' response; and the SPEW and CCF orbiting objects. ^_^ Understated response there. ...

Ah, dear SPEW, who ever knew him well? If energy and time kept up with impishness, I'd give it a brilliantly, er, impish critique. ^_~

Elein's right - if you want some good feedback, post in the Literary Forums; and it always helps to comment on other people's work first. Moved to Other Fiction

Thanks so much, DD . ^_^'' Your thoughts, impressions are always appreciated - naturally, the Eastern European propensity that deep dreamers and imps share in common make it more than ...

I gave it a quick read-through, Imp, and it's a lovely little sketch - sad, but it does paint a picture. You know, I was confused at first, with the ...

Not Non-Fiction by any stretch. Moved .

Very lovely, very vivid, very soothing. Your lines are filled with words that blossomed into beautiful images. Your piece put me in a very tranquil borderline dream like state. But ...

For an actual critique, rather than brief, off-the-cuff remarks. Though now that I've read through CL, Skye and Brad's comments, it seems sentence structure and syntax have, at least, mostly ...

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Thankyou so much Imp. ^_^ I'll get around to editing this as soon as I find the time (about a week from now), as well writing the third chapter. Just ...

Thanks :-) I'll edit as soon as my laziness goes away. And, actually, I have written a few things of fantasy before I came here, I keep convincing myself to ...

'Lo again Sureal. I suppose I'll head back through on a line-by-line, where it's called for, but being dialogue for the most part, that ought to move quickly. You've changed-up ...

Thanks endlessly, DD. ^_^ I was beginning to give poor Fallowdell an awfully bleak observation, thinking it really wasn't worth the time. But I did and do want to finish ...

Hullo Sean. I spaced it out for you, so that it'll be easier for others to read and critique. I'll try to get to it myself, one way or another. ...

Ach, Brad hit the editing aspects I was emphasising. Ah well. I'll go over some of them despite it, and then skip on to other things. [Characters, it seems] Firstly, ...